是誰拿走了我的寫作分數(shù)？（上）
朗閣海外考試研究中心
雅思考官的范文例來就是指名雅思高分的重要依據(jù)。今天，朗閣海外考試研究中心寫作組的專家，主要結(jié)合雅思考官所給范文，多年的考試及教學經(jīng)驗，給雅思考生們講解一下如今中國考生寫作失分最為嚴重的問題：文章的連貫性。
文章的通順和連貫是雅思大作文的評分標準之一。英語作文的語句上下承接，與中式的表達有明顯的不同，用語恰當可以使一篇論點普通的文章有一氣呵成之感。而這正是很多中國考生在雅思作文中意識比較缺乏的。關(guān)鍵在于，中國考生缺少使得語言表達連貫的方法，這就導致寫作的重大失分。
一、正確使用指代詞
使用的指代詞包括人稱代詞，物主代詞和一些特定的詞語。
★使用人稱代詞或物主代詞代替文章中重復出現(xiàn)的詞
劍橋4 test4 task2范文中的句子：
But I think the solution to the problem lies with the families, who need to be more aware of the future consequences of spoiling their children. If they could raise them to be considerate of others and to be social, responsible individuals, the whole community would benefit.
★使用特定的詞語來指代某一類事物
這些詞包括one, that, those, so, this, not和do的各種形式。同時，被替代的可以是名詞、動詞，也可以是句子。
①替代名詞（用one, that, those來替代某個名詞）
劍橋7 test B task2范文中的句子：
I agree with the view that stars in the entertainment business are usually over paid. However, it is also true that it is only those who reach the very top of their profession who can get these huge salary.
②替代動詞（用do的各種形式來代替前面提到的動詞）
劍橋4 test4 task2范文中的句子：
When they get to school age they have not learnt any self control or discipline. They have less respect for their teachers and refuse to obey school rules in the way that their parents did.
③替代句子（用so, this, 或者not來替代一個句子）
劍橋4 test4 task2范文中的句子：
Of course, factors such as loving relationships, good health, the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our happiness too. But this does not mean that people without these conditions cannot be happy.
